A one shot that managed to be too long.

Give it an extra star or two if you like shaggy dog stories and dad jokes. Otherwise, it's not that interesting. There just isn't that much to pull you into the story. The MC's love for pizza is quite the bit to hang the story on and for comedy, I DIDN'T LAUGH AT ALL.

Bottom line: Throw a dart at the comedy tags.

It was an interesting concept for a short story. The title was kind of misleading because it implies that the MC travelled back in time to find pizza, but...

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It's pretty obvious that even if the MC didn't timetravel, in either timeline, she would have gotten to eat the pizza anyway? so the timetravel changed nothing.

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Which kind of makes the whole time-travel part of the story moot since there are no stakes.

Nevertheless, there was a sliver of tension throughout (being found out/discovered by her family), and reason for timetravel, so that was done well.

The second half lost a lot of momentum.

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The time loop was also pretty predictable (the moment she crawls to get the cracker, you kind of know what will happen from then on) and there was no further twist on the ending so the story kind of dropped the ball on the delivery.

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