It wasn't that great. The progression for Therese's favor for Nice is not that realistic. Like come on, she already suspected Nice to be threatening her from the start. I want to give characters the benefit of a doubt when it comes to their common sense, but since this is just a oneshot, then I guess the only reason why Therese changed her views when it came to Nice is because of s*upidity.

Hmmm, It's kinda a little anticlimactic. Cause I was expecting a scheming MC that like have the umph you know? It's kinda boring tho. Also the only name I liked in the story is Therese the FL, The MC is "Nice" and the ML is "Lot". Like bruh who name their child like that.

Before anything else, I really need to bring up the issue of their names. Like... Seriously, what sort of names are those? It was difficult trying to take the novel seriously. Hopefully, it was a mistranslation.

Now, onto the story. While this is a short story, I feel like this could be so much better. For example, how did the females (heroine and villainess) get so close so fast? It just feels a little too plastic for my feeling. Like the other comment, I was looking for a manipulative FL but... more>> all there was a love-sick FL. But then, it is a one-shot so I really shouldn't have had high expectations... <<less