This novel is what happens when the author has a good structure but a bad foundation and doesn't know how to fill the inside of a house.

An what I mean by that is there is a big flaw right off the bat.

Dear Author if dragons are dying out due to a lack of astral flow (magic) than WHY are their bodies built like magic factories? They eat an convert the energy into magic an literally excrete crystals of condensed magic. Hell it's even stated they were the ones who brought... more>> magic to the humans an other races.

How can a race that literally excretes magic die out due to a lack of magic?

Also minor inconsistencies in the story. For example dragons excrete Bright Crystals Eco points this out that Ash is essentially stating dragons excrete on demand as she states the dragons have become depraved. However, later on instead of excreting the crystal she turns into a glowing human an the crystal pops out of her chest after Luna an the others essentially force her to do it.

As for the harem the only ones who actually love Ash is Rebecca, Oscar, an Eco.

Slivia only falls for him after she can not stop thinking about him after the race an how he helped her out but she is constantly comparing him to "that boy".

Luna only falls for him after he helps save Gaiwain because reasons.

Jessica only wants him because he is the Sliver Knight.

An sadly Ash is abused by Slivia an Eco. Literally everytime he dares look at another girl Eco an Silvia punch him, kick him, stomp on him, an throw him across the room. An its played off as if its sopose to be comedic. Let's be honest here if the roles were reversed no one would probably think about using abuse as a "comedic" effect.

An that is a shame because Eco legitimately has interest in him as a person but she is abusive towards him. An when she becomes less abusive its played as "now she is more mature" that is not how that works at all.

An the author can't decide whether or not he wants it to be fantasy echi or soft p*rn. For example Luna an Ash fall an Luna lands on Ash's face. Instead of being a normal person an getting off she sits there as Ash is confused an doesn't want to shove her off an to an extent enjoying it. Luna gets off on him breathing on her down there an decides to "faint" an lay face first into his c*otch. Slivia an Eco see this all go down an instead of going after Luna they decided to dragon punch Ash for no apparent reason.

An than there are the Necromania... when the other dragons fight they use magic, claws, bitting, body slams, kicking.

When the Necromania fight though they open their mouths as large as they can an spew forth hentai tent**les that rip off clothes an start secreting slime all over the girls an absorbing their life energy an on one occasion tried to enter one of the girls.

No wonder why the Necromania didn't kill anyone at the camp because their too busy trying to play hentai tent**les instead of actually fighting an killing their enemies.

I really wish that the author would completely rewrite this an devote to either being fantasy echi or erotica rather than this soft p*rn shit. (An get rid of the abuse being used comedically an actually work out a foundation).

What keeps me reading is curiosity rather than enjoyment right now. <<less