her friend of who knows how many years gets corrupted when she sees how much "wealth" the FL "has" and becomes an entitled brat with the stereotypical "why isn't all this mine?" thinking, disregards her friend's happiness and well-being, and only cares for mingling with the rich and wealthy. She almost gets raped and instead of thanking the FL for saving her asks whether she knows the guy and can introduce them. Thank goodness for the friend's mum who knows what's going on and tries to stop her foolish daughter.
Before our main leads got together I was going to sing the praises of this novel and talk about how it's a less melodramatic take on all those other Rich CEO x struggling-but-worthy-woman.
After they got together... the female lead became possessive, jealous, and irrational. She suspects he's cheating on her when he leaves the room to take a call, when a woman calls his phone, when he's out on a business dinner with his female secretary... Her self-esteem is cripplingly low. Given her past it's no surprising that she is suspicious. The world the ML moves in (is presented as) one where extramarital affairs and mistresses are as common as mud, but trust is the foundation of any relationship. Given that she can't bring herself to trust him I feel no investment as a reader in their relationship.
On the one side we have the FL who pretends she trusts him but is secretly suspicious at the ML's every move, and on the other we have the ML who destroys any other potential romantic rival despite the FL being completely uninterested. Should I say they're a pair made in heaven?
One positive though, is that
after they have s*x for the first time the ML gives her the morning after pill, which makes the FL very ill. It's rarely mentioned in novels/real life that the pill can have severe side affects and can often cause pain to women. I was surprised, but happy, to see this mentioned in the novel (even if it is for the sake of creating more situations). Of course he should have just used contraception...
The harem, boy, oh boy, the harem. Or potential harem as I should say. The female characters, even though they are strong (at this point, stronger than the MC) are written as moving eye candy. Never mind that the MC has a platonic friendship with them, the audience demands (?) so voluminous descriptions of their bodies, their curves, their (and this is a direct quote) "devastating feet" MUST be given.
a) they're 13. 13!
b) they are literally friends when he's not ogling them. I could somewhat forgive it if the characters had any genuine romantic feelings, but everyone (apart from the girl who's grandfather he helped save?) sees him as a friend (if that?).
when her parents truly did abandon her at the same time as her first love, a.k.a our bodyguard, broke her heart, all of these issues were amplified. She responds by creating a shell and not caring.
From Chapter 93:
"Han Meimei... was only 20... she really did not want to get married...
Han Meimei: Uhm~ I'm still young. Let me enjoy myself for two more years~
She would turn 22 after two years."
*gasp* she's 20! and in 2 years, she'll be, *gasp* 22! Who would have thought!
And here's an example of inner monologue-ing, also from chapter 93:
"[Character A]: What about [Character B]? It looks like that you don't refuse to get married in the game. If so, why did you refuse him in the past?
Zheng Xiaoguang thought in surprise, "Is he talking about [Character B]'s proposal to me? Why does he bring this up now? What an incongruous question. Does he think that I betrayed [Character B] or something?
"This is really strange..." Zheng Xiaoguang was not sure about his attitude, so she decided to answer his question truthfully."
Writing down a character's stream of consciousness, if you're not writing in first person, is lazy writing. Even something along the lines of "Zheng Xiaoguang was surprised. [Character B]'s proposals had never been serious, and these questions were weirdly pointed. After some hesitated, she answered with "he was just joking with me..." " would be better.
Obviously these are webnovels, so I'm not expecting great feats of writing, but this is the only novel I've read so far that has such lazy writing...
he's the CEO or whatever of the company that owns the game so the real money he's spending in-game to buy her the fancy clothes/weapons he's going to be getting back...
The translation quality/the author (at this point it's hard to tell) is really dragging this down. Characters are playing word-games but none of the "traps" come across. The characters' relationships are becoming very messy. The author is pulling loop-holes out of the air to make things difficult. Example:
A lecherous director agreed to a deal, then went back on his words; a secretary from Shen Yun's company dealt with it, but then the director insisted that Xia Yu had to come to his personal villa or he wouldn't sign. Shen Yun sends her into the tiger's den, she almost gets raped until the director's wife comes and catches him. Afterwards Shen Yun feels bad about the whole thing and gets angry and beats up the director... despite tacitly agreeing to the whole thing?
I'm going to continue reading this, but I hope that the translation/story-telling picks back up again.