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Different World Business Symbol
October 18, 2016
Status: c9
2/5

Misleading title. Should be named " Failure World Business Symbol" or "How to become a Slave/Prison B**** in a New World"

MC ends up in a fantasy magic/sword world and decides to sell soap to make a living. Decent start, right? Except...... the MC promptly makes a train-wreck of crappy business decisions. Luckily god himself must be watching out for the MC since he has roughly half a dozen "blessings" to keep reality from occurring (3 in 1 language blessing, 1 plot armor blessing, and 1 super luck blessing).

Examples of mistakes... more>> in just the first 9 chapters include:

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1) Selling his fancy high quality cookware and paper at dirt cheap prices. Sold at ~300k monies. Yet he literally sells 20 pennies for 3 MILLION monies just a few days later.... that cookware's probably worth a lot more AND he could've used it in his plans to make soap.) This mistake is excusable since he just got there and didn't know anything. But I would've still kept the paper just to jot down my notes/ideas/process in [Japanese] to keep my ideas straight & keep New Worlders from knowing what I'm planning.

2) Creating his product in plain view of everyone outside the damn castle. Great way to get your simple idea stolen. Inexcusable. There's no copyright protection. He could've simply burned the wood outside and made the soap in his room or something. (as long as he's using no/low-smoke heating.)

3) Giving away his first bar of soap at manufacturing cost. Wut? MC already knew soap is a luxury good. Realistically everyone's going to expect ridiculously low prices (seriously, who wouldn't brag about receiving something like super fancy perfume for $1?) Derp. Besides, he was dirt poor, at least turn a profit on it to cover a meal/inn cost or something.

4) Telling his newly gained slave the entire manufacturing process and requirements. She just met you, literally nothing's stopping her from just taking the process and selling it to the loanshark for her freedom & 10 million monies. Derp. Even the loanshark realizes he could just force a slave/future worker to tell him the manufacturing process. Should've just left the slave to burn firewood for the ash/ask around the city for sources of ash (since it doesn't seem like the citizens are using it for anything).

5) Buying a damn plot of land AND a factory on literally his 2nd day in business. Holy carp you farking moron. Should've just stuck with the stall idea and bought a RESTAURANT to obscure your manufacturing process/requirements (since a restaurant can easily use salt, oil, and firewood).

6) Telling a freaking loanshark the exact manufacturing cost. He's a damn loanshark, he doesn't need to know how much profit you're turning. That's just asking to get robbed later down the line. Better to keep costs/profits a secret so people mistakenly believe you're barely turning a profit --> Less likely for your entire operation to be seized. Hell, I would've just BSed it by claiming it's a re-manufactured bubbleberry product to make it more believable/obscure my process or by claiming it's made by some unique talent/blessing only I have (Thus ensuring my safety/discouraging theft).

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Dragon Life
October 13, 2016
Status: c30
2/5 (Gave it an extra point for the fluffy.)

It's a neat premise but the inconsistencies and extremely cliche love story ruined it for me.

Basically a moron gets reincarnated as a dragon. Biggest annoyance is that the author can't pin down how much common sense/memory the dragon has in various situations. One moment she's decently competent, the next she derps out completely.

1) She has plenty of past life memories, to the point where she can work out that eating humans --> subjugation party --> knights. And even work out a... more>> plan of action.

But the next moment she derps out completely and fumbles her secrets away left and right to everybody. (cleric, witch, probably even the captain).

2) She has no guilt eating humans wholesale & even burning them to a crisp. The next moment she has guilt about not entering a slave contract to save a country she isn't even a part of. Wut?

3) She basically learns she can use magic (shapeshifting, regeneration) even making a grand connection between her food source and her shapeshifting.... then does absolutely nothing to figure out more about her powers. Derp. Failure on numerous levels. (She should've at least had some memories that dragons are hunted/killed.... in fact people tell her straight up that some of the past earth dragons were KILLED. In fact she even gets blindsided several times in the story. Derp.)

Inevitably coming to bite her in the rear around 20 chapters in... and of course she completely forget about her shapeshifting powers. Derp. <<less
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Magi’s Grandson
August 6, 2016
Status: v1c22
Not recommended. I regret having gone through volume 1.

1) MC is basically OP Wimp Lo from Kung Pow but significantly less funny (yet still a huge joke). He was intentionally taught wrong as a joke but somehow managed to become overpowered.

2) Entire series is just fanwank. MC is stupidly OP & moronic right off the bat. Reads like a bad Dragon Ball fanfic except with a magic premise instead of aliens. Also veering heavily into the Harem route. 9 to 1 ratio my arse.

3) MC is literally... more>> retarded.... in two lives. Sadly reincarnating didn't solve that problem for him. MC is so dense that he can't figure out the violence/war potential of pretty much >everything< he thinks up.... even after being warned dozens, if not hundreds of times. Officially listed as "lacking common sense" which I guess is more PC than calling him retarded out right.

4) Entire universe is also "lacking common sense". Practically nobody in universe can follow their own rules of magic which is simple enough that a toddler can understand (imagination + some vague mp requirement which is just ignored by everyone). Heck magic rules are so lax that everyone is basically a low power reality warper but are too moronic to actually utilize their powers effectively. (Just look at Shin's "fire bullets" the author tries to explain it pseudo-science but will annoy anyone with even a middle school understanding of science.)

5) Moronic plot that gets plowed forward awkwardly and painfully just to create scenarios/situations for everyone to praise the MC further. <<less
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Bringing the Supermarket to the Apocalypse
August 8, 2016
Status: c14
1) Lots of arse pulls & conveniently placed solutions to awkwardly push the plot forward.

2) MC is quite moronic & is only alive due to the heavens themselves providing solutions for him.

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MC ends up in apocalyse? Oh good, super competent sidekick also acts as walking exposition and tells me everything I need to know. Magical superwatch gives convenient excuse as to why I'm able to pull out my Supermarket supplies. MC was dumb enough picked up a token female that isn't even a cultivator & can't even fight zombies? Presto, now she's magically a cultivator.

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3) Cultivation is OP enough to push his Supermarket gimmick to the back & forces the series straight into generic xianxia territory. The introduction of the "Apocalypse watch" makes the supermarket gimmick even less relevant.

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He literally ate just two of the lowest grade crystals and is somehow able to beat up the thugs that even his sidekick explicitly admitted had higher fighting power than him. (Ch 8: They only know how to bully ordinary people. If not for their fighting strength being higher than mine, I would definitely go sort things out with them.”) IIRC, Ch2 makes it sound like his sidekick is a rank 1 cultivator since he's fat (able to feed himself --> afford crystals) & out hunting without weapons.

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4) Poor character design on MC. He's way too accepting of everything (might have to do with his lack of mental capabilities).

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The apocalypse watch. He knows nothing about it, is aware that it'll take his info, can store & basically warp crystals (presumably other things) across the world, AND IT'S CONNECTED TO THE INTERNETS.... Better strap it on immediately and start storing valuables in it. Wtf? Dude, your superpower literally makes it nearly useless. Ch 12 even gives a good reason NOT to use it. The only security measure is apparently DNA.... So if someone holds you down & presses the button they can steal all your stuff? Yet he still dumps supplies into it. Even worse, if DNA is really the only requirement, they can just hack your arm off.

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The Hero
May 5, 2017
Status: v7c2
2/5

It reads like a crappy fanfic of My Hero Academia (Hmm, both came out in 2015...) hodgepodged with a mix of other well known works such as World Trigger (spiderweb sky portals bringing neighbors monsters), Worm (serious MC with common sense, general deconstruction of superhero genre & realistic consequences), MHA/Dial H for Hero, etc (Haves vs Have-nots, Normie MC gets artifact/power that forces him to become a hero, aspires to become a true hero, etc. *Wouldn't be surprised if the ring is literally brainwashing the MC.). Even the first fight... more>> mirrors MHA almost exactly, the only difference is the motivation which actually makes the MC look retarded.

It wouldn't be so bad if there was more consistency....... Characters act extremely out of character or acts stupidly to the point of being jarring. I'm not surprised the series went on hiatus as it's obvious the author ran out of works to rehash since the quality drops noticeably and silly plot-lines are introduced to try to struggle forward.

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The MC is a mass of contradictions.
1) MC is set up to be a guy with common sense & military training. Gets caught up in danger, wisely decides to runs from danger, danger finds MC anyways, hero saves MC & takes him away from danger, MC stupidly runs back into danger, same hero has to save MC again resulting in fatal wound to hero.... MC decides to run away from danger again......

Then it copies MHA's first chapters almost identically: MC spots helpless child in danger, realizes he's just a normie and decides to run since he's got no way to fight, right?....... NOPE, can't run away, he decides to run straight at the monster and......punch the monster with his autistic self. Wut. Literally went against everything the MC was built up to be. To be fair, the ring might be screwing with MC's head because the ring does release some sort of light/aura around his head later, probably keeping him dimwitted or something.

2) MC wisely decides to stay away from hospitals/government because he's got a from a freaking different world with a magical ring. Wise decision, for all he knows his organs might not even be the same as the people in this world. Yet immediately agrees to get checked out at the hospital by his new GF which he didn't have in his old world, wut. (This goes wrong immediately since Obvious-Evil-Guy immediately figures out something is up with his ring but keeps it to himself.)

3) Supposedly majored in Computer Engineering, yet can't do basic research. Gets a hold of a computer to look for information and does the equivalent of browsing reddit for the day. Wut. Why the hell wasn't he looking for basic information like what the hell magic is, where heroes came from, and how to use his powers?

4) Goes to school, decides to keep a low profile since his otherself doesn't have hero powers (according to token GF)..... immediately decides to explode the training lizard. Wut.

Along with many other examples.

BUT...... it's not only the MC that has issues:

Token girlfriend, she's basically only there for exposition yet she never fights alongside the MC. She magically recognizes the MC is the silver hero even though this is his first time transforming, he said nothing at all in his interviews, & his otherself has NEVER manifested any powers. How the hell did she figure out it was him? She's apparently a B rank hero yet never shows up for any of the fights, suspicious since B ranked heroes are usually called upon the most to fight, with C/D heroes doing support work (the big 2-wizard fight is excusable since the battlefield was large & maybe she was somewhere else, but what about the other battles?). She agreed MC's probably from a different world since he can prove he's not the same person she knew (he was basically transported to this world, has knowledge of computer engineering (majored in Comp Engi in Uni, but his otherself majored in Heroing), has superpowers unlike the person she knew, & is literally wearing a magical ring that can't be removed. She agrees to answer all his questions yet leaves out some of the most basic questions anyone in the same situation would ask.... such as "WTF is magic/heroes and how do they work?" or other such simple questions.

Ironman: Supposedly a rank D hero, literally nothing special about him but his tenacity. Magically gets upgrade to a powerful monster detector that can detect monsters better than the MC (rank A hero) or other heroes can.
Likewise the military/news reporters: They've been fighting neighbors monsters for how long? They've proven cameras work (just wireless transmission of info gets screwy due to mana apparently), so why aren't they using long range methods of gathering information like satellites, drones, etc? Instead they face the same issue with every monster attack where they stupidly attempt to set use wireless, gets interrupted, then struggle to put up "wired" communications. Holy crap, at that point why aren't they just going the Evangelion route and simply wiring the entire place up? They've explicitly stated that they've managed to segregate the city into "districts" because apparently that keeps the neighbor gates controlled, why couldn't they just have wired cameras already setup?

Even the monsters themselves aren't consistent: Apparently even the weakest monster is resistant to conventional firearms, this is why heroes are needed & the military doesn't just bulldoze them with tanks or antimaterial rifles. Yet a news reporter manages to significantly damage a Wizard (supposedly a Class S threat) with a really big gun.

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Kumo Desu ga, Nani ka?
September 28, 2016
Status: c273
Going to be lenient: 4.5/5

Recommended Read. It's like Charlotte's web except with more spiders and more VRMMO-esque concepts and lolis/shonens.

The PoV cuts are interesting but they get extremely repetitive. (Especially after you figure out everyone's archetype, it starts to feel like padding.)

That awkward moment when the author's writing is skilled enough to dangle twists in front of the reader and reviewers don't even realize they've figured out one of the twists.

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"I felt like I'm reading a actual spider with a human intelligence not a human reborn as a spider" - Scandalf.

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Sadly like virtually every CN/JP novel, power creep is something that no writer so far has properly accounted for which generally collapses the story & really takes the wind out of plot. <<less
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Magi Craft Meister
January 9, 2017
Status: v4c2
3/5. Mediocre.

Starts off interesting with a relatable/pitiable protagonist (hard working orphan, gets sent to another world to take on the mantle of "Magi Craft Meister, " has enough common sense to not diarrhea out technological advancements too quickly. Sadly the author can't keep established facts & character personality straight to save his life, continually introduces fan-service scenes in a poor attempt to keep things fun, and hops all over the place like the protagonist himself.....

Actually the Author is probably a pedobear.
- The village children just strip nude in... more>> front of MC after he builds a hot springs (which they've never seen in their life).
- Reiko is wearing nearly indestructible, easily cleaned clothing, yet strips nude to push a boat, lol wut? (Even though there's cleanup magic and her indestructible clothes & body could probably be cleaned with fire if she wanted to....)
- Marcia & the other competitors just happens to end up in a swimsuit, because "tradition"? (And they're all like 15 years old females... while the rules for a GOLEM BOAT RACE demands a human be on board, why? Wouldn't it be much more effective to have autonomous boats if possible?)

Examples of such derps include:
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1) MC knowing he can't release too many technologies (asks if patent systems exists, knows current world golems are poorly made things) and has enough common sense to render his potentially compromised warp gates inoperable at the start. Yet he completely forgets this and goes around tossing around innovations left and right without building any anti-theft safeties into his new innovations like the warp gate has (how difficult is it to have his plane/boats/golem have the same option as his warp gate?..... why is he making all these planes and ships operable by anyone?)

2) Supposedly magi craft meisters are shunned during the predecessor's time and there is only one magi craft meister at a time.... yet said magi craft meister is extremely powerful, wealthy, and has access to highly advanced technologies. 1, 000 years later somehow magic craftmen are all over the place with regular non-magi craftmen nowhere to be found (still haven't met a non-magic craftsman magician 5 volumes in....) The author claims the war 300 years ago wiped out a significant portion of the magic population but that wouldn't explain why magic craftmen became so popular or why non-magic craftmen magic people are nowhere to be found.

3) Supposedly writing magic formulas in Japanese makes them more efficient and would be an excellent way to prevent others from stealing his work (Having a self destruct option like the Terminator CPUs when the magic plate is opened up or something would be very effective, right?) Yet either the entire world can either magically understand Japanese or he just forgot all about this.

4) Apparently swords are a thing, but flint/firesteel aren't? A stupid way to make MC's "lighters" popular. MC also apparently completely forgot about his magic stone powered stoves he made for the village which would make lighters completely unnecessary. (Since they can literally run on fragments of fire magic stone dust found in a river bed.)

5) Current world golems suddenly gain a level in technology during the boat race ark. Apparently golems are rare, hard to make things yet all of a sudden an entire city has boat racing competitions with custom made highly advanced golems (Reinhardt made Lorelei which is somehow an autonomous golem which are supposedly very difficult to make, wut?)

6) Magic craftsmen also gain a level in technology during the boat race arc. They can suddenly read the orders/mana signature of enemy golems to figure out their directives and who sent them. Wtf? Why was this not mentioned/done during the 3 volumes that came before it? Why the balls didn't he do this when Gen/Gon first attacked & he re-purposed them?

7) The various villains are extremely stupid. I guess common sense fell drastically along with the technology/magic levels of the world. Supposedly Magic craftsmen are very rare and precious commodities being jealously hoarded by various nobles yet Dumbarse McNoblederp tries to rhape the magic craftsman chick MC was providing blueprints to. Supposedly she's the apprentice of a famous local magic craftsman which makes it all the weirder than said noble would try to rhape her. The village villain is yet another dumbarse noble that tries to manhandle the MC even though the King is trying to curry MC's favor. (How the hell do you fail that hard in your mission) ? The boat arc villain is dumb enough to leave a crapload of evidence (literally left 4-6 golems with his signature and very clear sabotage orders.... in a city filled with magi craftmen that could read said orders/signature if they got their hands on them, wut?)

8) Around volume 4 when MC is making his robot army author claims "Knowledge transfer is not effective in transferring knowledge to other humans." Yet he literally received most of his knowledge from the previous magicraft meister via knowledge transfer.... and has been employing it with very little problems. The only downside is that it's like having a "book" memorized in your head to reference. But that's still PRETTY DAMN EFFECTIVE. I'd love to be able to download books directly into my brain.

9) MC drops a bombshell about magic (apparently everyone has a limited amount) as late as volume 4 chapter 6. (Prompted because of Reiko's concern to him)...... then it's brushed off because the MC has a magic body which can absorb ambient mana, so it's okay for him. Wut?

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The story really ran out of steam & isn't going anywhere.... It started out decently but made the main character too OP too quickly, killing any hopes of a decent story. Once the friend enters the picture, there isn't even a decent slice of life story since it tries too hard to be more "MMO-esque" but fails.

At some point I started wondering whether the author was including the chat-room commentary & skill/equipment descriptions just to pad out the word count.
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The Guild’s Cheat Receptionist
October 13, 2016
Status: v2c1 part8
4/5
Tentative rating, decent enough to continue reading but too early for a definitive rating.

Ignore the reviews spouting junk about gender. (&Amp; Seigin they're monster insects. A 30 feet tall spider monster would be pretty freaky even if you didn't fear insects. Especially if you accidentally get an eye full due to your observation cheat. I find it stranger than more MCs don't get surprised/mildly shocked when they face Cthulhu like abominations/demons since most people tend to squirm just watching a gruesome accident IRL.)

1) Nobody knows how people will... more>> react to actually changing gender. Especially since nobody IRL has been forced to change genders, let alone race. Most likely said reaction will depend significantly on the personality of whoever is being gender bent. Also keep in mind he changed into an ELF, they're known for their low libido/birthrates. If you want to read that kind of stuff, go read some gender bender smut.

2) This is a slice of life story about an adventure weary MC who wants to live a quiet life without rocking the boat. Sort of like the generic "become a blacksmith/shopkeep/hunter/etc" that other reincarnation/fantasy novel MCs end up being after "The Quest" is complete. Here the MC has fallen in love with the simple receptionist life. (Which is pretty much a perfect fit for her.) This is especially evident in vol 1 where she does things to keep the status quo such as maintaining the ecosystem in mind (wants former comrades to not cause damage to the forest), keeping cheat information/knowledge from people (to watch the choices people make on their own but preventing them from rashly wasting their lives.) I'd argue this sort of novel is a more accurate depiction of fantasy/reincarnation novels. More people prefer to be an office worker instead of a firefighter risking their lives every day. Likewise most people would probably settle down instead of continuing to hunt down demon gods if they didn't have to. 3) I'd argue this is a more entertaining read that her exploits because she's so high spec/OP that most, if not all encounters would just end in a crushing victory for the MC. It's more interesting to see how she has to deal with raising a fantasy child (dragon kid), love advances (literally has to tone down her cheat level charm), dealing with others (reformation of assassins), and raising heroes to keep the balance (former comrades). <<less
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Goblin Kingdom
October 14, 2016
Status: c70
4/5

Recommended Read. Decently well written.

1) It's similar to Re:Monster like Naruto is to One Piece (Dumb OP kid trying to be hokage/king). Unlike Re:Monster the MC doesn't have some OP evolution cheat that also forcefully evolves all his subordinates. In fact his "divine protection"/skills usually end up hindering him one way or another. Also every individual in GK has to strengthen/evolve themselves individually which is a bit more realistic than Re:Monster (King basically makes living/warfare standards better for his people so they can evolve). 2) Warfare/battles are more realistic than... more>> Re:Monster. Severe injuries actually persist *gasp*. Such a novel concept.

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Mecha Gi Ga and Hasu will save the day. \O/

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3) Interactions are more believable than Re:Monster. Such as the affection between Reshia and GK or the treatment of prisoner of war. In Re:Monster, everyone just bends over backwards to the MC. Here GK knows that everyone is extremely prejudice against monsters so goes out of his way to treat them with kindness and slowly win them over yet still prioritizing his little civilization. 4) Apparently the gods are d*cks in GK unlike Re:Monster where the voice of the world-bro is chill. 5) MC's memory is simultaneously great yet crappy. He can memorize a ton of names & situations easily but his memory of his previous/human life is horribly inconsistent. He distinctly remembers he had a human life but can't recall simple stuff like smoking meat. <<less
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I Was a Sword When I Reincarnated (WN)
September 30, 2016
Status: c53
3/5

Mediocre. Read if you have free time.

Basically a dimwitted otaku meets truck-san (car-san here), reincarnates as an OP sword, lives his new life like a derp learning mmorpgs, & wielded by adorable slave neko-girl.

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Surprisingly being trapped alone in a magic-free zone for 3 months actually made him less retarded.

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The characters are..... plain. You have the OP moronic MC, the hyper competent sidekick w/ tragic backstory, freaky strong dragon err..."spirit" chick. Along with the archetypal support crew (kind-hearted merchant bro, wise ol' dwarf blacksmith, kindhearted receptionist-san, intimidating but softhearted guild-bro, smart glasses elf, etc), & a host generic villains to keep the action flowing (no primary antagonist as of c53 other than possibly the divine swords that are all "mysterious" and associated with massacres).

Truly a sad waste of a unique premise. (They honestly should've never given the MC telekinetic powers right off the bat. Or at least kept it severely limited instead of having him almost immediately solve all limits of his 3 minute flight/mana consumption) Currently he's just a generic OP reincarnation novel protagonist that has to hide his true form.

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Seriously, a better way of setting up the first ~15 chapters: MC reincarnates as a sword --> Gets wielded by a goblin who he really dislikes but has no other choice (because he's literally a sword) but can't do anything about since he's getting exp/skills/stones --> Goblin becomes the strongest in his den & ventures out due to overconfidence (or tricked by MC into going out) --> Goblin gets too cocky and killed by another stronger creature (cannon turtle or whatever) --> Gets knocked away by the blast & accidentally kills a floater creature granting the floating skill --> MC starts life as a slowly floating spell casting intelligent sword --> start of the rest of the story.

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Douluo Dalu
March 17, 2018
Status: c336
Well deserving of a solid 3/5. Too many flaws in storytelling, trying to act cool for the sake of acting cool, & predictability. Recommended read if you have free time & nothing better to read. It's actually complete & not terrible.

1) Sorely in need of revision/editors. Author relies too heavily on asspulled situations/solutions to cover the flaws in storytelling.

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I'm not surprised MC was only an outer disciple with his inability to follow simple principles. Tang San is a disgrace to the Tang Sect.

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A) MC is supposedly hidden weapon/poison master. Fails at poison until ~100+ chapters in. Author remedies this by asspulling a cultivation/herb treasure trove for MC to loot. Miraculously the title duolo (Dugu) protecting the cultivation/herb treasure trove is a complete moron & can't recognize most of the herbs there.... yet somehow another title duolo can recognize several of the herbs several chapters later just by the effects they had without even seeing the plants themselves. Wat. (To be fair the other duolo is from Spirit Hall which has more resources but the sheer ignorance of Dugu doesn't make much sense except to give MC a reason to loot the herbs without Dugu murdering him on the spot.)

B) MC's stated multiple time to be ruthless in preventing potential future problems, the Tang Sect motto: "pull out weeds by the roots"....in practice almost never does this. In fact he almost does the complete opposite by almost killing the door guard of his first academy. (Stupid moron didn't have the strength to pull them roots at the time), luckily Grandmaster stops him. The closest he's come to actually following the Tang Sect motto with Blue Sunshine sect doesn't count, he stupidly talked about the missing leader IN FRONT OF A TOURNAMENT AUDIENCE.

C) Tang San & love interest make a duo team..... Everyone and their mother already knows their name & faces. Yet Grandmaster decides to force them to compete in 7 vs 7 team battles slap a mask on them, & even uses the school's name for their competition name yet suddenly nobody knows who they are even though they kept the same tournament name & are using the same abilities... Anyone with half a brain should be able to figure out the identities of all 7 just on those pieces of info alone.

D) MC had been told to only use his second spirit when his life is in danger. Proceeds to show it off in a crowded tournament setting. Likewise his hidden weapons are displayed constantly to his enemies. I don't think the author understands what the "hidden" part of hidden weapons is suppose to mean. Hell 180+ chapters in & Oscar is the only one to properly use hidden weapons (since his targets all die.)

E) Hidden weapons don't need copywrite protection since it takes a minimum of 10 years of training to assemble.... Orangutan Blacksmith proceeds to flawlessly disassemble and reassemble a hidden weapon "10x faster than Tang San" on first try. Tang San should've been going crazy at this revelation but he doesn't bat an eye.

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2) Characters lack common sense at the worst times just to push plot forward.
Heavy spoilers ahead, read at own risk:

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A) Xian Wu's sudden clumsiness.
Xian Wu's true nature can be detected by Title Duolo level characters yet isn't detected by the various Title Duolo's that kept appearing early on (such as Tang San's father, Dugu, Bone/Sword who kept on eye on Rongrong, Chrysanthemum Duolo, somehow all of them missed Xian Wu even though she had no anti-detection cover until Tang San gives her the love flower & Chrysanthemum even held the flower yet didn't detect her. Of course Xian Wu clumsily drops the aura covering love flower at worst time allowing Spirit Pontiff to immediately detect her as a spirit beast. This makes no sense since she's a close combat/agility Spirit master.... Why the hell would she even fumble for no reason like that?

B) Spirit Pontiff's tactical retardation:
Supposedly the Spirit Pontiff rose to power with her cunning/overwhelming power to win over the others in Spirit Hall. Yet she's a complete moron. Instead of holding the entire MC team captive for harboring a spirit beast she inexplicably lets them go. Supposedly this was just to keep Grandmaster safe but that doesn't mean she couldn't just take them all for interogation & let Grandmaster go later. She also sends the Tang San assassination squad with orders to not release spirit rings for some ridiculous reason which gets several hundred spirit masters killed. Later on she also has 7k+ spirit masters die because of her tactical retardation which she's happy about....

C) Grandmaster's tactical retardation:
Stated above, has team cover up even though anyone with half a brain can already figure out who they are. Has supernatural ability to see the physical state of others & extremely broad treatment/combat knowledge (evidenced in training regiment of MC's team somehow new MC's physical limits even though MC practices a completely unique Tang Sect cultivation tech, also in the recuperative medication used, & knowledge of things that even Title Duolo's aren't sure about) yet keeps leaving MC to face mortal danger constantly (especially during tournament arc where he has two assassination attempts on his life.....)

D) Tang San:....... This is going to be way too long listing all the problems with his character. Basically everything but the biggest is his inability to follow simple principles/orders given to him by his Tang Sect/Father/common sense. This alone leads to most of the problems Tang San faces (and even the actual death of Xian Wu & near death of himself which ironically could've been avoided if he simply followed the Tang Sect way).

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Emperor’s Domination
April 19, 2017
Status: c319
2/5

Started off extremely good then dropped off a cliff.
Read until MC heads towards Eastern Hundred Cities, story goes extremely downhill from there. (~250 chapters)

Pros:
1) MC has good reason for his arrogance/cunning (since he's lived through millions of years) & has plans after plans prepared & isn't relying on pills, treasures, etc that fall from heaven like most wuxia novel MCs. (Those treasures, pills, etc, are usually stuff he or his students left behind.)

2) MC actually has reasons for destroying sects unlike MCs in most wuxia novels,... more>> dude planned it all along.

Cons:
1) Author recycles the same scenario over and over and over again. Fights drag on like Dragon Ball Z but worse because of how stupid the opponents are, how the author keeps saying how "amazing" the opponent is, just to have the opponent crushed in one sweep by the MC....... somehow people are also able to instantly recognize MC's super abilities/physique at a glance even though they were supposedly missing for thousands, if not millions of years,

2) The amount of padding in the story puts wonderbras to shame. Cultivation/abilities take up so much of each chapter so things progress painfully slowly.

3) MC's opponents all behave the same, it's like MC is fighting the same people over and over again with the same allies. Clearly they're all practicing some sort of heaven defying resurrection technique which only has the requirement that they change their name. /s

"Geniuses/ancestors" keep flaunting their power (acceptable the first few times, but after he heads into the Eastern Hundred City, Li Qiye's infamy is widespread enough that there's no reason people should've been acting like that towards him. Literally two disciples almost immediately find out about his exploits in the Middle Kingdom, which makes it extremely unbelievable that word didn't spread or that the older generation (s) didn't find out either before challenging him.

4) People act extremely out of character at times. For example, this is supposedly a world of crouching dragons, hidden tigers, yet virtually everyone is ignorant to the point of retardation.

A few examples: MC & his entire sect is roaming along on a GIANT SNAIL, everyone laughs.... giant snail kills hundreds of them. Wtf, isn't common sense to be extremely suspicious of any weird thing that might be a hidden expert? Happens again when he's roaming along with a GIANT TALKING WORM..... people laugh, worm kills hundreds. Likewise, people laugh at MC, MC kicks their arse. <<less
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Akuyaku Reijo Ni Koi Wo Shite
September 30, 2016
Status: c15
3/5 Mediocre. Readable but... not really fun. Hopefully things improve as the story progresses.

Story in a nutshell: MC reincarnates thinking he's in a MMO-esque world, only to realize he's actually trapped as a side character in a dating sim where another reincarnator is the protagonist.... yet too dim to figure out a decent solution.... and too busy trying to live like a MMO-esque protagonist instead because he can now do magic....

Author tries to inject some dark undertones (rape as a backstory/criminal empire) in preparation for stuff down the line but... more>> it really comes off as forced. (Things not as cheery in the MMO-esque reincarnation.)
Basically a crappier "An Otome Game’s Burikko Villainess Turned into a Magic Otaku."

MC's character is a mess and contradictory. Literally. Not sure whether it's intentional due to the author claiming MC's got 3 personalities (Original denizen, reincarnator invader, and a merger of the two) or because the author isn't really a great writer (MC's actions and thoughts are contradictory at times). The author isn't bad...... but isn't really good.....

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For example: He has no problems using modern knowledge to build his underground empire & actually has his sensibilities kick in whenever his subordinate points things out according to "their" sensibilities (So clearly the Ryou portion is still quite lucid & influential). Yet the next moment he's absolutely flabbergasted that the protagonist reincarnator is speaking against slavery to a noble. Wut.

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After Transformation, Mine and Her Wild Fantasy
September 12, 2016
Status: c43
4/5 Going to be lenient & hope things improve. Might as well give it a shot if you've got the free time.

Started off with a unique gimmick (MC starts off being split into a boy & girl body that shares the same mind/soul). Unfortunately author implements it quite poorly. Seriously, all the MC had to do is claim his male body was his brother/boyfriend and he'd have no problems. Really indecisive and dumb for a guy with supposedly godlike parallel processing powers.

Utilizes the generic "one half covers all the weaknesses... more>> of the other" cliche while both sides are currently on separate adventures. But oddly the MC lost all his memories prior to splitting into two bodies.
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In this case the male half is a skilled sword/melee fighter while the female half is skilled in almost all magic except "space" magic (presumably they'll link up to fight together later and the dude half will cover that weakness).

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Heavenly Jewel Change
September 2, 2016
Status: v12c100
4/5 Recommended Read.

You know those stories where the MC starts as a crippled yet wealthy/aristocratic douche-child happily living a decadent lifestyle only to have some sort of modern day/otherworldy derp forcefully possess him, receives some magical sky jewel (err... space jewel) from the heavens that grants him superpowers/cures his illness, & relive his life in a heroic yet rapey way? Welcome to Against the Gods, I mean Heavenly Jewel change.

This is one of those stories.... except the douche-child doesn't get possessed & his increase in strength is directly related... more>> to how much he harasses/rapes women which actually makes a lot of his heroic yet rapey ways make more sense than other novels.

His greatest strength is undoubtedly his weaponized puns (if you ignore his magical space rock, OP cultivation tech, and hell-training). Truly a most fearsome ability.

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There are several slip ups such as his teammates somehow being aware of his darkness powers before it was revealed, or little witch joining their battle team. Which doesn't make sense as she was already in another team... what kind of tournament allows for even opponents to swap into each other's team? Their team didn't even have much to gain from it since they already entered the top 4 and could've just surrendered. Also almost immediately after they accept her, the MC swapped his cult tech for a ton of stuff & unlimited access anyways... so basically he risked his team just for a bit of gold since Zong armor sets (for his teammates) & materials could be easily gotten as he can come and go as he'd like.

Also don't be surprised when the MC stupidly explains his trump cards out loud to his enemies immediately after he uses them. He became stupid when he started showing off his abilities, especially in the tournament setting.

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The Lazy Swordmaster
April 13, 2017
Status: c66
4/5
Interesting twist on the reincarnation into another world genre. Basically a slight deconstruction of the Isekai (different world) genre about a former hero taking an extended vacation & trying hard to not become the hero in the new world. Story direction is heading in an odd (bit boring) way but hopefully they maintain the entertainment.

MC is in a new world! BUT....

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He's already defeated the demon lord & died doing so in the old world....

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MC gets a powerful female mage companion who's falling in love with the MC! BUT....

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She's only powerful due to some horrible human experimentation & only has a few months to live.

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MC meets a dragon!...... And he's a pretty cool guy.

The negative reviews are pretty silly.

1) He's called the lazy swordmaster not because he's literally lazy like the Lazy King, but because of the front he puts up which causes everyone else to labeled him as such. So him acting "out of character" is actually him acting to his character. MC is someone who can't really say no if he's actually asked to do something (mostly because everyone else is too weak to deal with whatever situation) like a typical hero BUT.... he's extremely jaded due to his past experiences. So he fashioned a lazy reputation for himself so nobody really asks him to do trouble things like save the world & when he's actually asked, he'll do things in a round-about manner.

Spoiler

MC is basically spending his current life as an extended vacation since his past life was wasted dying to save the world from the Demon Lord. He's pissed off at the temple folks because of their "holier than thou" attitude they use to justify screwing him over in his past life by throwing him at the Demon Lord (which resulted in MC's death)...... and have the same attitude here..... and try to throw him at a Dragon in this world. Not surprising he'd be pissed off at the temple folks. Seriously, they literally use the excuse "the goddess asked so you have to do it."

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2) MC isn't OP for no reason.
Not sure why this is a gripe people seem to have since they have no problems with Chinese protagonists being able to move mountains by simply cultivating & eating pills.

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His past life blessings (practically the Triforce of Courage) has followed him to this life & he practices an abnormally powerful cultivation..... errr "mana breathing technique, " MC has been stated to train discretely, & spends a lot of time "out of sight/playing hide & seek". This is why he could basically kick around the assassins (even though it was difficult since his physical body explicitly couldn't keep up). And powerful mana has been literally stated to grant supernatural physical abilities (mana sword, cutting spells, sensory abilities, hiding abilities, physical boosts, and sword throwing). Seriously, even a dragon calls him a monster & refuses to teach him magic out of fear of how powerful he could become.

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3) He hides his abilities extremely well but him showing his mother (via Ian and Sera) a bit of his power is reasonably justified.

Spoiler

Riley is like 16 years old or something.

Problem: Because MC's mother is so ridiculously kind to him, MC feels obligated to let her be proud of him but still doesn't want anyone else (rest of family) knowing his skills/power. MC also knows that MC's mother is literally a fighting novice so she wouldn't really know how amazing her son is..... Ian was the Mercenary King & literally spent almost Riley's entire life suspecting him of great power/abilities. Apparently that's why he's so faithful to MC. Sera is also a very trustworthy maid of his mother.

Solution: Get Ian & Sera to confirm to her that Riley is amazing. One was a former Mercenary Hero, the other is a trustworthy & competent personal maid of said mother. If both of them say Riley is amazing, even the mother will get a pretty good grasp of how amazing her son is.

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Dungeon Defense
September 21, 2016
Status: v2 afterword
5/5 Excellent.

Read it. You won't regret it. Don't spoil it for yourself by reading the reviews. Just hop right in.

That is all.

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For those harping about the romance, keep in mind the MC's got a mind that works many times faster than "normal" folks, a dulled sense of emotions (dude isn't a happy guy & feels life is meaningless since he was 6), and suffers from manic mood swings among other mental issues (Part of his "acting", the best lies are mixed with truth after all). He's also using s*x as a tool (Such as Barbatos making her think she's in control, etc) which is in line with his character. Because he wants to be King of the Pirates~ I mean "everyone".

He's also not falling in love "too fast" remember he's already played though the game & knows the personality/intellect of virtually every major player. His chosen harem "click" with him intellectually and/or emotionally. In fact he's falling in love SLOWER than most xianxia protagonist who fall in love as soon as they see the damsel in distress.

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Tsuki ga Michibiku Isekai Douchuu
August 31, 2016
Status: c152
3/5. Recommend only up to the first major battle or so (then pretend the MC died for a better story)

Good example of why you shouldn't make your MC super OP unless you're going for satire.

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When you have the MC literally slap around one of the strongest beings in the world as soon as he appears..... then have him power up EVEN MORE, that prevents any decent story telling as all suspense is lost unless the antagonist ass-pulls some stupid power.

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Started off strong with an interesting twist (he didn't ask for this /deus ex), introduced interesting characters (Tomoe, Mio, etc), had decent antagonists (various nations, goddess, etc), & even flips a few reincarnator cliches on its head. Unfortunately granted MC too much power.

As others have pointed out, the story quickly falls apart after MC's first major battle. At that point even the sidekicks/characters are more interesting than the MC but due to the author's lack of character building nearly everything takes place "off panel" where MC's sidekicks just handle all his problems for him while fawning over him for being a moronic powerhouse that only operates on cliches.

Spoiler

Yet another reincarnator novel where the world can only exist due to the sheer stupidity of its denizens. (Literally nobody except for reincarnators have decent combat knowledge.) Handwaved by claiming they just "relied on the goddess blessing too much" which quickly falls apart when you realize there's actually an adventurer's guild that nearly everyone is already a part of who routinely fight to-the-death battles against strong monsters without goddess blessings.....

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Main Character Hides His Strength
December 31, 2017
Status: c106
So-so. 4/5 because I'm bored without anything else to read (really closer to a 3/5).

    • Author writes fun and engaging scenes which is where the majority of praise is coming from. Unfortunately...
    • The author sucks arse at setting up situations. Nooba is right, there are a metric ton of plotholes because the author can't figure out how to make people act..... like people & can't set up situations so that they make sense.

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      For example: Getting magic power/class, MC snuck into the summoned's group again so he can get a magic class because apparently magic academies & organizations won't let him in & he's scared they might have someone/something powerful enough to see through his deceiver's veil.... Then the author promptly forgets about this and has the MC directly enroll in one of the top magic schools. Wat. Author also has the MC sneaking in all manner of places without fear of discovery (dumb MC goes around using his real name and face). Wut. It would have made much, much more sense if the MC decided to join the summon'd group because he knew of the 7 hero shrines and wanted to snag the legendary hero magic class (es).... Chapter 1 & 5 makes it very obvious he wasn't aware of such which makes his future actions ridiculous because he could've just derped around sneaking into magic academies, tricked demons into giving him their stats (gambling), and steamrolling through their quests/missions like he later does at Airfruit.

      Also like NoobaLoob said, people are willing to help out the MC left and right as long as he doesn't reveal his identity to them, even after he does, several are still willing to help him (or at least not attack him outright) as of c106 which kills the credibility of MC's backstory.

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    • It's not all bad though, the author does try to justify some times in a semi believable manner.
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      Turns out the higher ups crafted most of MC's bad rep on purpose since they actually don't want the demon king dead due to the numerous even worse calamities that follow. This is plausible as there is no Internets and it would be fairly easy to spread false rumors widely via authorities in a place with middle age tech. Especially as everyone takes the status window as law.

      MC also isn't just hauling a half decent mage or scrolls to defeat the demon king since he's aware of the future calamities.

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