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Age of Adepts
July 5, 2017
Status: v1c75
This story is really crappy. And here is why. It outright steals the soul super computer idea from WMW, the protagonist takes forever and a day compared to other's on this site to make any progress at all in his actual growth, the fights are completely unrealistic, and worst of all the reasoning is complete garbage.

Seriously they have an underground resource area with actual worries about cave in's from big attacks killing everyone in the local area so normal "mages" can't be the glass cannons they normaly are. Meanwhile the... more>> reason body cultivators don't completely own everyone in the cave system is because they apparently all fire off big attacks...

Lol what? Seriously? First the author says that in the cave system you have to focus on only just barely killing your enemy with minimal environmental damage... and then the one cultivator types that would be cherry picked perfectly for this suddenly doesn't? What? They all create big attacks automatically? They can't modulate their own strength when they are swinging a sword around or punching? Does this author have no real life body control himself that he thinks your always using 100% of your physical power in everything you do in life?

Even worse the girlfriend of his that is a sadist and constantly beats him up is effectively a body cultivator. Her favorite tactic is to rip out people's throats with her teeth/fingers. way to go keeping internally consistent.

And this is just one example out of dozens I have come across while reading this story where the author makes ass backwards statements like this.

Don't even get me started on the interaction with people. The girls are all PMSing all the time and this is just insane PMSing. Either they act nice or they act like complete bitches. And the way cultivators have relationships? Why bother having relationships before Adept? Seriously? Even though the author provides a few examples of this clearly not being the standard case he still treats that everyone is backstabbing everyone to become an adept idea going. Just... eugh! No this story is utter crap. It wouldn't be as bad it it didn't have dozens of logical fallacies or at least remain internally consistent with its own material. But it doesn't.

The one redeeming quality it has is its world building. Which it does somewhat okay? Still doesn't make up for the utter garbage that is its internal consistency though. <<less
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Main Character Hides His Strength
February 13, 2017
Status: c32
So far while the Main Character has retained his strength that has cowed the world he now lives in. He hasn't acted foolishly. He has goals and his previous actions in gathering strength have backfired on him forcing him to act in the shadows, not drawing too much attention to himself but enough to still gain access to strong magic. So far he has managed to acquire his class of magician, not saying which one or any other specifics but he still needs to get taught magic.
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In Different World with Naruto System
February 13, 2017
Status: c200
I tried to power through and ignore all of the horrible qualities... couldn't do it. It just got worse and worse and worse. If your hypped about naruto then this is a story you will potentially enjoy, if you can just stand naruto though I don't recommend it. The writer had issues with consistency. He placed limits on the system... and then just ignored them for his self insert. The guy can probably punch the planet and explode it and then sneeze to bring it back by this point.
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