Otherworldly White Dragon Lord

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What are you going to do when you pass through another world?

Yalin(MC): Perhaps, many of those seniors who passed through another world would like to use violence to solve their problems, but I like to control the fate of a country with economics and races with faith, I use benefits to instigate others so that I profit, and even making them take risk for me without them even knowing. In each country the highest is the king and behind the king is a string that is attach to my hand, for I am their puppeteer.

Yalin(MC): Certainly the credit does not only belong to me, I must give my thanks to the great knights and their leader Zero(Code Geass). The supreme master of blood, the moon princess(Tsukihime), the black and white princess, and also my ‘good friend’ called by his title the ‘God’s left eye’, president of the neutral autonomous city. Finally I must give thanks to my loyal and competent subordinates!

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异界白龙之主
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07/25/16 BionicArk Translations c5
07/19/16 BionicArk Translations c4
07/18/16 BionicArk Translations c3
07/15/16 BionicArk Translations prologue+ c1-2
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agreg
agreg rated it
August 11, 2016
Status: c5
Huhh... How do I describe this...

It's a story that claims to be "different from all these web-novels" from the very beginning, and then starts giving you signs of being a low-grade fanfic (despite not being based on someone else's fictional world... apparently).

Description of the first 3 chapters as an example of what I mean (not much of a spoiler, since almost nothing actually happens there) :
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Prologue is fairly neutral, but the very first chapter was... quite confusing. First, an infantile "God" appears, who claims to be protagonist's chat buddy (and the only friend) ; this is followed by what I can only describe as EXTREME WORSHIP of Chinese Communist Party (especially Mao Zedong) ; concluded with "God" turning from Mao into a Rozen Maiden character (the novel has no care for copyrights whatsoever), coquetting with the protagonist and then refusing to be held by him.

The second chapter has MC, for some reason, believing that all web-novels are real (questioning God why he's always looking for no-good douches and losers), then claiming that no real person would ever want to end up in another world, then reluctantly agreeing after God BEGS HIM ON HIS KNEES.

After establishing that MC is "not like all those fictional characters" (which is repeated several times afterwards), third chapter has MC asking to make his as OP as possible ("It’s one thing to read a novel and it’s another if you really pass through"), to which God responds "OK, but you can't leave your house". Then the novel makes it very clear that it's going to be uninventive about its details, as MC is given a copypasted floating HUD (this thing only made any sense in The Gamer) to turn his interactions with the world into an RTS of all things (including creation of obedient units from available resources... copypasted from videogames - mentioning HoMM in particular).

Then the most jarring (so far) development happens: MC is allowed to "summon" fictional characters from anime ("real" people would hate the idea of being taken from their world, but "abducting" anime characters is A-okay... Also, why specifically from anime, and not anything else? Like, anything chinese?). Judging by synopsis and the previous mentions of anime, I expect blatant usage of characters from existing works (which basically makes this novel a weird crossover fanfic). Well, at least these are not expected to be instantly loyal... Although, whether it's going to be handled in any remotely believable manner, remains to be seen.

By the way, before sending him off, "God" says that he's not immortal (despite confessing of being the Creator of worlds).

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Did I mention it's a game-mechanics novel (more specifically, RTS-based) ? Because it totally is. There is a HUD, resources ("material" and "spiritual" points, as well as actual materials), resource-producing buildings, producible units (obedient to their creator) and even some kind of research tree (for units, at least). Not to mention that MC cannot leave his base and doesn't really have anything else to do.

As a "bonus", chapter 4 is chock-full of specifications (read directly from the HUD), most of which are completely useless to the reader at this point (only one of described units is created - and that's what the chapter basically amounts to, sans descriptions).

The writing stile suffers from the usual problem of chinese novels: overdetalisation. The narration feels somewhat clumsy, and translator - while doing a fairly decent work on the whole - clearly has no editor (or at least proofreader), despite not being a native english speaker (probably spanish, if I had to guess), which doesn't really make for smooth reading. I can't help but mention this line as (the most memorable) example: "Glasses Panda came with a huge and naughty smiling face!" (I'm not sure what it's supposed to mean, but judging from context, I'm guessing it's about sending a friendly emoticon in chat).

The novel so far doesn't give much assurance that it's not going to become a train wreck. However, this "so far" doesn't cover even a hundredth of already written material, so maybe it's not as bad as it seems to be likely to turn out?.. I'll give it a 3 for now.
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